Please Tell Society
Please tell society
I love my body
If given a chance to trade
I’d say why betray?
The one who’s fought to heal my cuts
To take in oxygen and release thoughts
Of dreams and hopes where I see myself
But only there does my body dwell
Please tell society
I love my ethnicity
Proud to walk on this grass
I exude what I have learned
I soak in the mannerisms in this air
Say hello to proud and grateful me
The past the present
I will share because I care
Please tell society
I love being me
To be born different
Is only the hidden normality
When faced with difficulties
We seek similarities
So perhaps it is not I that needs to love more
But the mirror to society facing the door
What is society
In this tangled web of events
Isn’t it part me?
Isn’t is part you?
Beatrice Padgham • Mar 6, 2017 at 10:01 PM
I love this poem so much. The repetition of “Please tell society” was incredibly powerful, even more so with the questioning of society at the very end. The word choice surprised me (in a good way), I wouldn’t normally expect a word like “mannerisms” in a poem.
Thank you so much for sharing this poem, I hope to read more of your work!
1376 • Mar 7, 2017 at 10:07 AM
Thank you for reading! I am glad you noticed the ending questioning!
Jackson Atassi • Mar 6, 2017 at 7:59 PM
I’ll be honest, I don’t really know what makes a poem good or not nor do I read a lot of it. With that said, I liked your poem a lot, as Kim said I enjoyed the slant-rhyming you used and the structure of it. I also think that the message of acceptance is important.
1376 • Mar 7, 2017 at 10:06 AM
I am not sure if what you’re saying is a compliment… thank you for reading though. This poem is about not caring whether people accept you or not. It’s about being proud of who you are, and loving who you were brought on this earth to be.
Cassidy Kemppainen • Mar 6, 2017 at 1:06 PM
This poem spoke to me, especially because we live in a society that is so quick to judge. People instead should except themselves for who they are, and everything about these ideals are encompassed in this poem.
1376 • Mar 6, 2017 at 2:43 PM
Thank you, I am glad you agree!
Kimberly Kemppainen • Mar 6, 2017 at 12:08 PM
I really enjoyed your poem! I think that it elegantly explores an important issue. The repetition that you used in the poem makes it more powerful than I think it would’ve been without it. I also think that the “near rhyming” ensures that your poem flows very well, but extends beyond a middle school level of rhyming in a poem.
1376 • Mar 6, 2017 at 2:38 PM
Thank you very much! I was nervous to post, but I am glad I did.